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Fixed

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When I first came here, I had to be fixed. I wasn’t broken, but getting fixed was about not getting any more puppies in my belly. That’s fine with me.

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My puppies were adopted at the shelter where I “lived” (and by lived, I mean barely existed) before I was rescued. Nowadays, I feel that puppies would take away some of Mom’s attention – which belongs 100% on ME. Plus, I use my belly for other things, named treats.

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Mom’s story for the Highlights Annual Fiction Contest wasn’t broken, either.

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But, boy oh boy, did it need to be fixed. Mom’s cyberclassmates and her cyberteacher from the Contest Magic class gave suggestion after suggestion and asked important questions that made Mom think of important answers and make important changes. At the end of it all, the story was a LOT better than it started out. Like me!

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Before

After

After

Some things Mom learned were:

1. She is a mental case when it comes to commas.  (She, kind, of, already, knew, that,,,)

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2. The story problem needs to be close to the beginning of the story.

Help!

Help!

3. Readers need to learn about characters by what they say and what they do.

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4. A problem can’t solve itself. Characters need to work at it and make the solution happen. And it can’t be too easy.

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5. Conflict and tension are important. (Mom stinks at both of them.)

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6. Sometimes, even your favorite parts of a story need to be cut. It might be scary and hurt a little, but it has to be done.

...has to be done...

It’s like getting my nails trimmed. Like it or not, it has to be done….

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Comments on: "Fixed" (54)

  1. I am glad you got out of that prison Cupcake! Yay for mommy!!

  2. I am glad you had a great story with a problem and a solution that mum helped you work out …and now,,,,,,,,,you can help mum,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,and I am sure she will do just fine even if her commas are a pain 🙂 Hugs Fozziemum xx

  3. Oh Cupcake, I know you’re ever so happy that your Mom rescued you and made your life a lot more fun and secure AND happy! I’m sure you are quite an inspiration for your Mom – you are for me too! 😉

    Hugs, Sammy

  4. fredrieka said:

    I did to it was a rule from the shelter. I am fine in fact mom says it eventually had a calming affect on me something to do with harmones

  5. I don’t like my nails cut either, but it’s true about having to be done.
    Good luck to your mummy in the contest!

  6. I’m glad your mom’s story is a lot better now :o) and I’m glad you will use your belly for treats :o) I agree for the nail trimming, it has to be done… but why?

    • That is the question of the century, E. When Mom got me from the rescue, my nails were long and gross and almost curly. I thought they were perfect like that….

      Love and licks,
      C

  7. We wish the best for your mom’s new story! 🙂 Nail trimming? We collies hate that too….. but we get treats if we cooperate somewhat so its not all bad! 🙂

  8. Biting your nails might be the solution to that story problem. 😉
    I read mom’s story – before and after. I liked it at first and then LOVED the end result. So fixed and job well done. *hugs* G
    P.S. Glad you got untangled from those Christmas lights. Problem solved! (Although very cute.)

    • Thanks, G. It’s good to know that Mom’s story is actually better. She loves everything she writes, so she’s a BAD judge. I like your suggestion. I do enjoy biting, licking, sniffing, chewing, scratching, and otherwise housekeeping on every inch of my tiny body. I should taste my nails and see what I can do.

      Love and licks,
      C

  9. I’m glad you were rescued and have a better life now, Cupcake!

  10. Boy you have a lot of friends who are early risers. Wish you good luck in the Highlights fiction contest. That would look great on a resume. Good points about writing a story. With the low word counts today 300-500 words, it’s challenging to develop a story with all the required elements.

  11. Cupcake, I’m sure glad you are there to help and inspire your mom’s writing! Woooowooooooooo!

  12. I don’t know how your Mom ever got along before you came into her life! Keep up the good work Cupcake!

  13. I like those comparisons with Cupcake and your story! Good luck in the contest.

  14. Cupcake, Your Mom and I have the same problem with commas.

  15. We had no idea you are a mommy Cupcake…goodness, we cannot tell you how happy we are that you are with your mommy and being looked after so well. We just love you to bits and pieces precious girl.
    Wally & Sammy

  16. Cupcake I did not know this about you. I am so happy you and your Mom found each other. It was meant to be.

  17. So cute, Cupcake! Those are some very excellent lessons your mom learned. I think everything, from time to time, can use a little fixing . . . like my dinner. 🙂

  18. I’m so glad you got out of the Shelter, Cupcake. Our Mom volunteers at our shelter and tries to make the dogs and cats in there a little bit better. But being with a family is the best!

    Boomer and I are rescue dogs so we understand. Although, we were thrown away and didn’t ever go to the shelter. It took Mom a long time to catch me, Fuzzy. When she got both of us were weren’t fixed either. And we were really, really, really skinny.

    Not so anymore!

    Fuzzy and Boomer

    Linda
    http://coloradofarmlife.wordpress.com

  19. You look petrified in that last photo. Are you thinking something like “Why in the world is Mom laughing and smiling and taking pictures of me, instead of growling and frowning and helping me by grabbing me and running???”? 😉 Great post! 😀

  20. Cupcake, your mom sure did need all your attention and you hers. Look how much you’ve helped her solve!

  21. Great advice Cupcake, I’d like to find a writer’s support group near me. I could see myself writing more if I felt comfortable bouncing things of others.

  22. Did you find any good treats in that bag or the garbage? That would make the best story.

  23. Your picture as a mom is priceless, Cupcake. I’m so happy your mom rescued you, so you could help one another. Pawkiss 🙂

  24. Your mom rocks!!!! I’m so thankful she saved you and gave you a wonderful home!!!! You are one blessed pup!!!! Hugs

  25. I, also, am comma challenged, most of the time. LOL

  26. […] changes is something writers have to do – whether they like it or […]

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